New poem -_-

[Candide]

From the fallow lands, I leapt,
And bore no dark ambition.
Ere the presence of departing Love
I was wrought with a plaint disposition.
In the fallow lands I wept,
Like the empyrean there above.

Amid the airs, the empurpled veil
Proliferates manifold
Romance like a plangent wave,
So obtrudes Love’s dominion’s wail
And the mysteries unfold

In tenebrous lands so lie
(Where the daunted and pliable lie)
Not one hue of azure sky!
Now dawn, in our hearts, rises never.
(Love bares no light again)
Now no effulgence can dissever
The good roses from our sin!

So, all is night, for is shorn of the light,
No aria dwells within.
No eyes will they glaze
In the recesses of my soul
And it’s immortal blaze!
No lilt of olden flowers bloomed
Laments the fallow land entombed,
Or memories of pleasant days!


I suck at poetry... :disgust:

[Burner]

I suck at poetry... :disgust:

No u dont, that was quite good actually. I'll be honest and admit that i ddin't understand some of it (very big words x_x) but it was very good nonetheless. It flowed nicely and thats one of the most important aaspects of poetry imo. Good work. :)

[sCK]

I suck at poetry... :disgust:

was that part of the poem?

[TiGeR]

What people will sink too for more posts =) Btw i like ur poem. looked liek u had porblems keeping ur ryhme scheme together and therefore compesated by puting words that didnt really fit? I think next time write out everything u want then go back and see wat is changeable. The best poetry is that form the heart =)

[Vaulander]

And using every day words like "Duh, muthafuka, dude, homey," and other words we can understand without spending 2x the time looking through a dictionary than we do reading the actual poem, hehe. Good job mate!
V.

[eFaReL]

Man gj, you dont suck in my opinion, that better than anything that i can come up with.

[NOF]

I noe some people who will say they suck when they know they are good just to get more attention that they would normally. Im not a dick if i sound like one. Peave gj!

[shiver-]

it is t3h g0su of t3h 1337 g0su p0ems!!

[Candide]

I noe some people who will say they suck when they know they are good just to get more attention that they would normally. Im not a dick if i sound like one. Peave gj!

A) Yes you do and you should be sorry.
B) I didn't do that for attention, I seriously do suck, that is just immitating Poe in a form.
C) Next time please don't accuse someone of the like, as you are less of a person to them when you do.

[AntarcticToilet]

Your very good I like that poem keep making more they will get better and better as you make more.

[shiver-]

ya i like ur poetry not as good as my bros tho :D